[考试升级]对高考英语作文(上海卷)的看法--大家来评卷改错

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  题目要求:用你身边的事例说明“天生我才必有用”(There must be a use for my talent.)。

   说到“天生我才必有用”,许多学生都说某人(自己的同学,朋友,兄弟姐妹)学习不好,但是会修自行车,懂电脑,会弹钢琴,会画画等。而且这个学习不好的“某人”都是在受到了嘲笑之后的某天突然表现出了才能,然后“我”就意识到不应该嘲笑他,“我”就明白了“天生我才必有用”。最可笑的是一个考生说自己成绩不好,大家都瞧不起,有一天在路上看到一个老人撞伤了腿,自己就脱下衬衣给他包扎伤口,送到医院。回来后就觉得自己可以作医生,就努力要作个好医生,就明白“天生我才必有用”了。姑且不说他是否真的会用自己的衬衣给人包伤口,但包了个伤口就能作医生这个思路真是怪异!还有许多人为了写一篇作文而把自己的兄弟姐妹说成是弱智或聋哑盲残,这个代价是否太大了一点。我无意嘲笑在高考重压之下的各位考生,但是我对当今的应试教育真的感到悲哀。作文反映出的是思路,而我们的学生思路的闭塞,眼光的狭隘,在这些作文中暴露无遗。

   另外就是英文基本功的短缺,我们这些在所谓传统教学法下走进大学的人至少不会把true写成ture,不会把smile写成smell,不会把prize写成price。而如今这些学生竟然在这些最最基本的方面错得一塌糊涂。有人写When I repaired the computer, my teacher smelled.有人写He won the first price.如果只是个别现象尚且罢了,但一天的阅卷竟然只发现有少数几个把true拼对的,让人难过。

   下边的第一篇学生作文我给了12分(满分25),第二篇给了23分。大家看后发表一下看法吧,也可以改改错。(语法和拼写错误全部未做改动)

  (1)There must be a use for my talent

   One day, the teacher ask me to enter his office. I’m very surprised. Because I’m only a ordinary student.(逻辑的混乱,难道普通学生就不能进老师的办公室么?)When I entered into the office, teacher said, “I hope you do me a favor.” “Me?” I said. Teacher said, “Have you question?” (Chinglish)“No sir”, I replied.

  “I know you had learned computer. So I hope that you type a writing for me”, teacher asked. I said, “I do.”

   After the matter(Chinglish), I know I can help teacher as well. At last I understand the proverb that is “There must be use for my talent.”

  (2)There must be a use for my talent

   My friend, Lee, was not born for books and papers. He could never get good marks however hard he had tried. His teachers considered him a stupid student could never achieve anything. But he did succeed, which surprised all of us.

   Although he was not interested in his studies, he really had a talent for music. I once learned playing the piano with him. I noticed that he had a good ear for music. Lee had few friends due to his poor performance in school. So the piano became his best friend. He kept playing the piano everyday. His parents decided to send him to a music school. It was not easy to pass the entrance exam. But he made it, while lots of “good students” failed.

   There was a use for Lee’s talent. Although he was not perfect, he managed to take the advantage of his ability. I am sure there must be a use for everyone’s talent.

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